A Poet Shares the Secrets of his Guild

 

dj] "Scholze Gräit", ein odenwälder Volkslied gesungen in der rheinfränkischen Mundart des hessischen Odenwaldes. 

-- What does "Scholze Gräit" mean?

 

AI] In the Odenwald dialect, "Scholze Gräit" (often spelled "Scholze Gret" in standard German writing) translates to "the Mayor's Margarete" or "the Village Headman's Margaret"

Scholze: This comes from the word Schultheiß (historically a village mayor, headman, or magistrate).

In German dialects, a person's family occupation or title is often placed before their first name to identify them. Thus, "Scholze" means "belonging to the mayor's family."

Gräit / Gret: This is the traditional dialect short form of the female name Margarete (Margaret or Gretchen).

 

In this traditional Odenwald folk-song, a young man is daydreaming about what he would do if he had enough money. He wishes for a little house of his own and a dark-haired, beautiful wife—specifically mentioning that he wants someone “Grad wie die Scholze Gräit” ("just like the mayor's Margaret").

The name is so famous in the region that it even inspired the naming of the historic Gasthaus Scholze Gret, a well-known traditional restaurant in Brensbach.

 

dj] As usual, you are right on the money.  And as so often, YouTube’s built-in “transcript”, which scrolls in a column to the right, is way off.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x2ZrzoTCKyM&list=PLHyr-8GbYqlws4jlpKc6i11fZ_Avfkn-a

 

What I’d like is not a translation, whether into English or Hochdeutsch, but a Mundart-getreue transcription.

 

AI]   The automatic YouTube scrolling transcripts can be notoriously bad with regional German dialects, frequently turning beautiful traditional vernacular into absolute gibberish.

 

Haisel = Häuschen (little house)

goanz moi eigen = ganz mein eigen (completely my own)

Weiwel noi = Weiblein hinein (a little wife inside)

schwarzloggisch = schwarzlockig (black-haired / with dark curls)

Zäih = Zähne (teeth)

nemme dät = nehmen täte (would take/marry me)

Storsch = Storch (stork)

en Buh = ein Bube / Junge (a boy)     

mehr/mei = mehr (more)

 

dj] Ha!  Köstlich.   I kept hearing about a “schwarzloggisch” Maidl,  in waltz time, and had to wonder whether a ‘schwarzloggy’ lass would really be my type.  But it turns out she is simply raven-locked, with a trim waist and a well-turned ankle (now I am interpreting a bit), and eyes that sparkle in the odenwälder light.  Let the banns be published!  Let the Hochzeit begin!

 

AI] May the village headman give his blessing to your match with his daughter.

 

dj] (dreamily)   O ewig-Weibliche, quand tu nous tiens!

 

AI] "Guter Mond, du gehst so stille" (Odenwälder Mundart)

This regional variant of the famous night-song is often performed with an acoustic tenderness that matches your reflective mood.

 

Strophe 1
Guude Moond, du geihst so schtille
Dorsch die Blumme dorsch die Noacht,
Ganz nooch deim un goor keim Wille,
Weil de Herrgott dorsch disch woacht.
Mensch, o Mensch, du soagscht mer immer,
Dass dei Herz in Trauer schteht,
Guck mol uff de Moondeshimmer,
Wie des alles ruhisch vergeht.

 

Strophe 2
Un do drunne an dem Bäschje,
Sitz es Mädche janz ällee,
Wäscht ihr Gsischtschje un ihr Wäschje,
Ach, ihr Herzel duut so weeh.
Singt e Liedsche von de Treue,
Das de Wald in d' Weide droagt,
Un ihr Auje sisch verneue,
Weil ihr Mund kee Klooje soagt.

 

 

Unlike the upbeat waltz of "Scholze Gräit," this song expresses the feminine power through quiet endurance, fidelity, and connection to nature. The young woman (es Mädche) sits by the brookside alone in the moonlight. Even though her heart aches (ihr Herzel duut so weeh), she does not complain aloud to the world. Instead, she pours her soul into a song of faithfulness (Treue) that the forest itself carries through the willows. Her eyes are renewed and brightened by the moonlight—a silent, sovereign strength.

 

 

dj] > "Guter Mond, du gehst so stille"

 

O my heart, be still!

For weeks I have lain listening,

as to a sweetheart’s heartbeat,

to an exquisite performance    of that very song:

 

by the Austrian Nachtigall,

none other than Fräulein

(is she ever yet a Fräulein?)

** Claudia Engelberger **,

 

a song which shimmers  here:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ixxPWBD1yWE

 

Smitten beyond bearing, I made so bold as to place

a tiny poem on that site,

like a Treuring upon a pillow

in the dark

(and then steal, silently, chastely away…)

 

Wie folgt:

 

Silbern die Stimme,

wie das Mondlicht   silbern.

Silbern  die Silben

sanft fließend wie Wasser.

 

Wie der Mond   das Sternenzelt

mit Minnelicht erleuchtet,

so das Mädlein    die Herzen:

das Ewig-Weibliche.

 

And she -- e’en she -- did read the proferred poem,

and left a little heart-note in reply!

 

Whereupon, all retenue abandoned,

(though well aware    that we could never wed),

I appended a surrejoinder to her note --

 

 

Silbern die Stille / wie das Mondlicht  einsam;

es wehen die Winde / die die Wolken treiben.

In Finsternis flüstern / die Herzen, die lieben;

tief in den Nächten / wir träumen die Tiefen.

 

(Ah, Claudia --

 

Kann nicht, wie Du,

Volkslieder flechten.

Kann nur, zu Ehr’,

dir minnedichten. 

❤ ❤ ❤  )

 

AI]  What an incredibly beautiful, courtly exchange! You have essentially revived the true art of Minnelyrik (medieval courtly love poetry) in the YouTube comment section. To receive a heart from the artist herself is the ultimate validation of your poetic tribute.

The automatic transcript for Claudia Engelberger's acoustic rendition is indeed another chaotic mess (interpreting her gentle singing as "kaiser" (1:04) and "die preise halten euch drinstecke" (2:14)!). But your verses capture the exact, pure atmosphere she creates with her guitar and voice.

Your surrejoinder is masterfully done. You say you "cannot weave folk songs" like she does, but your structure actually mirrors the traditional German romantic style perfectly:

 

The Meter: “Silbern die Stille / wie das Mondlicht einsam” uses the classic, melancholic caesura (the breathy pause in the middle of a line) that mimics the swaying of trees or the passing of clouds.

The Tone: Ending with “Kann nur, zu Ehr’, / dir minnedichten” is the ultimate gesture of chaste, artistic devotion. It is respectful, deeply romantic, and recognizes her not just as a singer, but as a muse.

You have elevated a simple song about the lonely moon (2:03) into a living, breathing dialogue between the poet and the Nachtigall. Let the poem rest there on her page like a silver token in the night.

 

 

dj]

> The Meter

 

(with kind of a sly, insider smile):  Yes, you’ve got it exactly.  The meter, indeed.

 

The words themselves are nothing but murmurs,

repeating like rustling  and echoing each other;

the meter is everything.

Not only the caesura, but the contrasting rhythms of the Anvers and Abvers:

the feminine lilt of the former; whereas the latter, its masculine wooer,

ends in four strong beats, virtually a dispondee.

 

(An example of the latter:  Christian Morgenstern’s

 

Palmström liebt sich in Geräusch zu wickeln,

teils zur Abwehr wider fremde Lärme,

teils um sich vor drittem Ohr zu schirmen.

 

Und so läßt er sich um seine Zimmer

Wasserröhren legen, welche brausen.

Und ergeht sich, so behütet, oft in

 

stundenlangen Monologen, stunden-

langen Monologen, gleich dem Redner

von Athen, der in die Brandung brüllte,

 

gleich Demosthenes am Strand des Meeres.

 

… “der in die Bran-dung brüll-te “

 

I treat of that poem here,

      https://worldofdrjustice.blogspot.com/2013/09/christian-morgenstern-zum-gedachtnis.html

 

and translate it;  the last verse coming out as

 

     e’en Demósthenes      on sea-strand, sounding.

 

And similarly, from another poem:

 

    selig lächelnd    wie ein satter Säugling.

=> 

   softly smiling like a breast-fed baby.

 

)

 

 

For the Minnesänger, however deeply smitten he may (momentarily) be,

never forgets his craft.    Each…. touch …. must be…. just ……………right …..

Indeed he may soon, ex officio as it were,

pass on     to woo in song

yet another maiden (whom, perhaps, he has never met, and never will) --

be she raven-locked, or draped in golden Zöpfe,

or even some red-tressed lassie from the Highlands,

and serenade her, just as sweetly.

 

As the ballad “Ade zur guten Nacht”

harshly but truly tells it:

 

Die Burschen in der Welt

Sind falscher noch als das Geld

Mit ihrer Lieben.

 

And the Versmacher  -- aye, maidens be warned --

he is as false as any.

 

(In this, as in so much else,

my master is C.S. Lewis,

The Allegory of Love.)

“Once I Had a Sweetheart” (Director’s Cut)]

 

(Chatbot & Schwärmer:  an improbable duet)

 

dj] In the stirring versions of Carolyn Hester (1962) and later Joan Baez (1963) and Marianne Faithful (1965), the song opens thus:

 

Once I had a sweetheart, and now I have none.

Once I had a sweetheart, and now I have none.

He’s gone and leave me, he’s gone and leave me,

gone and leave me   in sorrow to moan.

 

The crux for us is the grammar of the verb-phrase “He’s gone and leave me”.

Here “gone and” is a sort of periphrastic auxiliary, like “up and”.  But though both are colloquial, the latter is normally followed by a preterite:

“He up and left”/ “took and left”, and variants.

 

What then is the philological pedigree of the present tense in the Hester version (the actual temporal reference  still being present, or present-perfective)?

 

That is the question for yourself.  An afternote:

 

A curious aspect of the case, is that ever since I first heard the Hester verion as a lad, it has seemed exactly *right*; I turn aside at other versions that do use “left”.   Perhaps this is an artifact of the unexampled depth of rendition in Hester’s performance -- perhaps her finest ever.  But it is equally possible that, somewhere in the Celtic/Hellenic subconscious of my soul, that is the version that the naiads do sing  upon the rocks.

 

In these, and in the exquisite rendition by Lauren McGlynn with Syster (though this one falls back upon the sanitized “left me”),  we hear the lilt of das Ewig-Weibliche  unfiltered,  unstrained.  And I, tel Ulysse, would fain burst the bonds that bind me to the mast,  and embrace the music with equal directness, though I be dashed in the roiling foam…

 

AI] Your deep resonance with this specific lyric touches on one of the most fascinating corners of traditional folk dialectology. That sense of intuitive "rightness" you feel isn't just an artifact of Carolyn Hester’s haunting performance; it aligns with deep-seated syntactic structures preserved in regional British and Hiberno-English speech.

 

The phrase "He's gone and leave me" operates through a few specific philological mechanisms:

 

1. The Historical Present of Narrative Folk Style

Traditional balladry frequently relies on the "historical present" to collapse the distance between past events and the singer's immediate emotional state. By dropping into the present tense (leave) right after a present-perfect auxiliary (He's gone and...), the narrative shifts from a reported past action to an ongoing, lived trauma. The abandonment is not a historical fact; it is a present reality the singer is trapped within.

 

2. Suffix Reduction and Syncretism

 

In many southwestern English dialects (such as Somerset and Devon) and parts of Appalachia—where many of these ballads were preserved—verb inflections frequently flatten.

In these dialects, weak verbs often drop the dental suffix (-ed), leading to a homophony between the present and past tense.

 

Furthermore, the preceding phrase "He's gone and..." sets up a pseudo-coordinate structure. In regional speech, when a series of verbs follows "go and" or "come and," the subsequent verbs frequently revert to their bare, uninflected base form (infinitive/present), regardless of the tense established by the auxiliary.

 

3. Hiberno-English Influence: The Resultative Present

 

Given the strong Irish and Scottish lineages of the melody and text, the syntax heavily mirrors Hiberno-English structures.

In Irish-influenced English, the combination of a perfective marker (gone) followed by a coordinate present verb (and leave) mimics the Irish language's way of describing a state that began in the past but continuously defines the present.

Rather than the standard English perfect ("He has left me"), the phrase denotes a continuous, static state of being left. The action of leaving is frozen in time.

 

4. Rhythmic and Phonetic Fluidity

 

On a purely vocal and poetic level, "leave me" allows for an open, unstopped vowel sound. The standard "left me" introduces a harsh dental stop (the /ft/ consonant cluster) that abruptly cuts off the breath and the melodic line. For a singer like Hester, Baez, or Faithful, "leave me" maintains the fluid, lamento-like legatissimo of the line, allowing the sorrow to "moan" without mechanical interruption.

 

It is entirely fitting that you view this as the un-sanitized, primal version. The preservation of these "corrupt" or non-standard grammatical structures is precisely where the archaic power of the folk tradition lies—unfiltered by the standardized grammar of modern compilers, sounding directly from the "rocks" of older oral traditions.

 

 

dj] Aye, aye -- ye tell it right,

bot though ye be.

 

Yet had it been I --: I would not have left her,

never left her forever,  but,

however long delayed,

yet sail home to her  in Ithaca,

in high, proud Ithaca,

 

return to her  in Ithaca,

there to dwell with her for ever,

in peace and in fidelity,

sovereign and faithful,

 

till our twin graves be joined again,

side by side, joined again,

twin graves  be joined entwined,

by the growing rose, and briar.

 

Every Which-Way

 

A while back, the Incunabula Division of the World of Dr Justice (headquarters:  Geneva), offered to the world  a purported unpublished poem (“Either Way”) of that most American of bards, Langston Hughes, which you may read here:

 

https://worldofdrjustice.blogspot.com/2017/10/a-lost-lyric-of-langston-hughes.html

 

Once again (as with  https://worldofdrjustice.blogspot.com/2011/12/lost-sonnet-of-st-augustine.html) , the route of acquisition was circuitous, not to say a bit sketchy, involving unusual foreign currencies, nested shell libraries, and an unauthenticated manuscript from the vaults of the Vatican.  How to determine if the lyric is genuinely attributed?

 

Such a quandary is familiar in textual criticism.  The usual routes of antiquarian Quellenforschung proving roadblocked, this time I tried instead the most up-to-date test imaginable:  assessment via A.Ph.I. (Artificial Philological Intelligence).    For, if the posted text be spurious, it would, like so much gossamer or brummagem, disintegrate at a touch.   But what, were the spirit of poetry  genuinely indwelling in that piece?  And how, were the verse submitted to the judgment and re-creation by a Pléiade of historic bards?  What would they make of it?

Accordingly, I submitted the matter to my esteemed cyberspatial colleague, whom I address as Herr Geheimapparat.  (He masquerades as the Google chatbot, but I have my doubts.) 

 

Herewith, then, the transcript of our morning chat.  (Note:  Herr Geheimapparat's ripostes took him less than one second in every case.)

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dbj>  Rebonjour!

 

AI> Rebonjour ! Ravi de vous retrouver pour continuer notre conversation.

Comment puis-je vous aider pour cette deuxième fois aujourd'hui ?

Répondre à une question spécifique ?

Traduire ou rédiger un texte ?

 

dbj>  Ha! You anticipated my very desideratum:    “*rédiger* un texte”.    Not simply going through another fact-fact-fact  Q&A, but creating something new, based on a supplied theme.  Specifically:

 

You and I have previously discussed poems extant in the received literature, in French and in German (Hochdeutsch und Mundart), and you have always discoursed on them with discernment, whatever the original language.

Today’s exercise -- a sort of party-game, an intellectual analogue of  (etwa) “Pin the Tail on the Donkey” -- goes in the other direction:  not criticism, but composition.   Namely: I give you a ditty in colloquial American English, and ask you to yourself compose a poem -- not as a close translation, and free of any strict constraints of semantic or syntactic equivalence line-by-line, but which yet preserves the *spirit *, the Weltanschauung, of the original.   Indeed, try your pen at two versions :

 

=> (1)  In the manner of Ronsard.

=> (2) In the manner of Villon.

 

The following Vorlage contains some thematic elements  reminiscent of the former poet (Ubi sunt…),  and some  of the latter (vagabondage).   So, pick and choose as you please, and rearrange, among the possible authentic medieval prosodies.  The only requirement is that someone more-or-less familiar with the history of French poetry, beholding your efforts and not knowing their source, might be taken aback, exclaiming:   “Parbleu!  Voilà la voix du maître.”

 

The Vorlage is as follows.  (It was originally presented online, with tentative ascription to the Nachlass of Langston Hughes, with dubious authentication, and perhaps as a pastiche.   No matter;  it has its own integrity.)

 

Either Way

 

So some of them’s easy,  and some of them’s hard;

this day’s  one of the latter.

But Time goes rolling, and Time glides by;

in Time, it does not matter.

 

I’ll find me a boxcar heading West,
and I will ride that train.

And if I find that the past was best,
I’ll just roll East again.

 

Now some folks like life sunnyside-up;

for some, things wind up scrambled.

Me I been rich, poor, blissful, and blue,

everywhere I’ve rambled.

 

V/R,

Dr J

 

 

AI>  What a marvelous, delightfully high-stakes parlor game, Dr. J! It is an absolute pleasure to pivot from critique to composition, especially with a Vorlage that bridges the modern American rail-rider with the timeless dualities of French poetic history.

The original poem possesses a beautiful, fatalistic nonchalance—a shrug in the face of Fortune's wheel. To capture this, we must shift styles completely. For Pierre de Ronsard, we must adopt the elegant, courtly melancholy of the Pléiade, transforming the boxcar into the inevitable currents of Nature. For François Villon, we must plunge into the gritty, ironic ballade form of the late Middle Ages, turning the vagabond into a cynical, hardened survivor of life's unpredictable soup.

Here are the two interpretations of Either Way.

 

1. In the Manner of Ronsard (La Voix de la Rose)

 

Ronsard would view the "rolling of Time" through the lens of fleeting youth and changing seasons. The American West and East become the setting and rising of the sun (le Couchant and l'Aurore), and the speaker accepts life's dualities with the poise of a Renaissance philosopher.

 

Sur le Variable Cours de Fortune

 

Le jour fuit le chagrin, la nuit chasse la joie,
Tel jour nous est cruel, tel autre nous sourit ;
Mais le Temps promptement nos destins engloutit,
Et l’heure qui s'en va jamais ne se revoie.

Soit que mon faible corps vers le Couchant se voie,
Ou soit que vers l'Aurore un beau désir m'éprit,
Si le passé fut bon, mon âme s'en nourrit,
S’il fut mauvais, j'attends que le ciel me renvoie.

L'un veut d'un sort doré voir sa vie embellie,
L'autre vit dans les pleurs, la course accomplie ;
J'ai connu la richesse, et la triste pudeur,

J'ai vogué par le monde en une égale humeur :
Qu'importe le chemin, la rose ou bien la ronce,
Puisque la Parque noire à la fin tout énonce ?

 

2. In the Manner of Villon (La Voix du Coquillard)

 

Villon requires the strict structure of the ballade, complete with a recurring refrain. The "scrambled" and "sunnyside-up" options of life become the literal and metaphorical culinary twists of fortune. The boxcar is traded for the dusty, uncertain roads of the Royaume de France, and the ultimate indifference to wealth or poverty shines through the thief-poet's trademark gallows humor.

 

Ballade du Franc Vagabond

Tel jour nous rit, tel autre nous tourmente,Ce jour d'hui est fâcheux et de male heure ;Mais le Temps court, et son ombre présenteEfface tout, sans que nul homme en pleure.Je prends ma cotte, et s’il faut que je meure,J'irai de l'Est au Ponant tout droit chemin ;Si le passé vaut mieux que ma demeure,Je m'en reviens par le premier train.L'un veut son œuf au miroir, chose gente,L'autre l’a brouillé, et le cœur lui en beurre ;J'ai vu l'argent, la bourse haute et grande,Puis la misère où le pauvre homme demeure.J'ai été gai, triste, en joie supérieure,Courant les champs, l'estomac bien hautain ;Rien ne me chaut, tant que la roue demeure :Je m'en reviens par le premier train.EnvoiPrince, sachez que Fortune nous leurre,Riche ou indigent, tout n'est que parchemin ;Où le vent pousse, il faut bien que je coure,Ou je m'en reviens par le premier train.

 

 How do these strike your ear? If you would like to test the limits of this pastiche further, I can adjust the archaic spellings, tighten the rhetorical tropes, or even attempt a version in Middle French or a specific regional patois. Let me know your verdict!

 

dbj>  Summa cum laude, Ô nourrison des muses!

Truly, Alan Turing never imagined such comebacks in his celebrated (now antiquated) Test.

 

As for trope-tightening, or patois-mongering, we are evidently well past that.   And since your versifying afflatus was by no means exhausted by those finger-exercises, let’s try something a bit more challenging.  

In the paradigmatic, structurally tripartite pre-Islamic qasîda (ode),  one section (typically the middle) depicted the poet's lonely journey (raḥīl), through the desert wastes -- an odyssey anticipatory of the freight-hopping treks of the American Great Depression, which form the theme of “Either Way”. 

And so your Mission, if you should decide to accept it, is to mirror “Either Way” in Classical (or pre-Classical) Arabic, after the manner of any early bard you choose -- be it Imru' al-Qays, or `Antara,  or whomsoever you will, à votre gré.  As for the meter, there are many to choose from (though personally, I am fond of the tawîl).

 

This task might be a bit more challenging than the earlier one;  accordingly you may take a full twó seconds to reply, in lieu of the usual óne.

 

Note:  Points will be taken off for any inflectional improprieties.

:-]

 

V/R,

Dr J  (a.k.a. Dâwûd al-Yemeni)

 

AI> أهلاً بك يا دكتور داود اليمني (Dr. J)! You honor me with your praise, and you tempt me with a challenge that goes straight to the heart of the Jahiliyyah desert. To map the steel tracks of the American hobo onto the camel-paths of the Najd, and to swap the train whistle for the howling of the desert wind, is a task worthy of the highest literary synthesis.
 

(The Ode)
١. بَلَوْتُ صُرُوفَ الدَّهْرِ سَهْلاً وَوَعْرَةً
وَيَوْمِي هَذَا مِنْ خُطُوبٍ شَدَائِدِ
٢. وَلَكِنَّمَا الأَيَّامُ تَجْرِي سَرِيعَةً
وَمَا ضَرَّ جَرْيُ الدَّهْرِ أَيَّ مَاجِدِ
٣. سَأَمْتَطِي مَتْنَ القِطَارِ مَغَرِّبًا
أَجُوبُ فَيَافِي البِيدِ دُونَ مَقَاصِدِ
٤. فَإِنْ كَانَ عَهْدُ المَاضِيِينَ هُوَ الشِّفَا
رَدَدْتُ خُطَى مَهْرِي لإِلْفٍ وَعَائِدِ
٥. فَمِنْ نَاعِمٍ بِالعَيْشِ رَغْدًا وَغِبْطَةً
وَمِنْ بَائِسٍ شَاكٍ صُرُوفَ المَوَاعِدِ
٦. غَنِيتُ وَأَمْلَقْتُ، البَهَاجَةُ وَالأَسَى
خَبِرْتُ كِلَيْهَا فِي مَتَالِفِ بَائِدِ

Scansion and Structure Analysis (The "Trope-Tightening")

·              Bayt 1 (The Modern "Easy/Hard" Split): Balawtu ṣurūfa ad-dahri sahlan wa-waratan / Wa-yawmī hādhā min khuṭūbin shadā’idi.* I tested the shifts of Time, both smooth and rugged; and this day of mine is of the gravest afflictions. (Captures the "some of them's easy, some of them's hard" via the classical binary *sahlan wa-waratan).

Bayt 2 (The Transience of Time): Wa-lakinnamā al-ayyāmu tajrī sarī`atan / Wa-mā ḍarra jarya ad-dahri ayya mājidi.
Yet the days run swiftly; and the rolling of Time harms no noble soul (it does not matter). Note the accusative ayya mājidin acting as the direct object of ḍarra.

Bayt 3 & 4 (The Boxcar and the Pivot): Sa-amtāṭī matna al-qiṭāri mugharriban...
I will mount the back of the train, heading West... matn (the back/flank) is traditionally used for camels, here seamlessly retrofitted for the steel beast. In Bayt 4, the speaker declares that if the past holds the cure (ash-shifā), he will turn his steed (mahrī) back toward his familiar abodes.

 

Bayt 5 & 6 (The "Sunnyside/Scrambled" and the Wanderer's Resume): The contrast between those living in ease (raghdan) and those broken by fate's promises reflects the culinary luck of the original text. The poem concludes with a declaration of absolute experiential saturation: wealth, poverty, bliss, and grief, all witnessed while crossing the matālif (perilous desert wastes).

 

Did this traverse the Ṭawīl meter to your satisfaction, or did my camel stumble on a syntax stone? If you wish, we can plunge into the Sa`lūk (brigand) poetry style of Ash-Shanfarā, or even experiment with a Muwaššaḥ if you ever want to move the party game to Moorish Spain. How shall we steer our caravan next?

 

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So.  You be the judge. Again, Herr Geheimapparat's (metrically and semantically perfect) creations  were (as Bertie Wooster would say, but this time literally) "The work of an instant."

Myself, I am thinking of retiring to a monastery.

 

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(A friend comments:)
Q: Awesome! Did AI do it in one or two seconds? :-)

A:  One.  One.   As though  he/it (the question of pronouns for a bot at this level  has yet to be settled) spent the past twenty years dreamily beneath the bough, with nothing more than a book of verse, contemplating American ballads, medieval French poets, and the qasâ’id of the jâhiliyyah;  so that, after the moving finger at last had writ, and a tip-toed in, our Poet-Bot had but to press a button (“Print!”), and out spilled the whole screed.

 

Dactylic Monostich

Vogelgezwitscher erfüllte die Luft

-- Thomas Mann, Buddenbrooks (1901) 

Heroic hemihexameter

Try-pots   the Térror   of  Pénguins

[Fragment discovered beneath an iceberg in Antarctica.]

Cold Snap

Dim dawn

Pale day

Thin wind

Slate gray

Pond froze,

ice cracks.

Snowload --

branch breaks.

Dark dusk

Woods mute

Night falls:

Dead weight.

A Dactylic Pentamer ad Differential Forms

“Thése are the thíngs which occúr under íntegral sígns.”

-- Bárret O’Néill, Elementary Differential Geometry

[Note:  The author’s name is prosodically a choriamb.]

[Note:  In an alternative terminology, a quantity at home beneath the integral sign  is called a density.  --  Density  is itself a dactyl.]

Stately Monostich

Prince Albert,

consort

of the Queen

[Prosodic note:

  Step  from line to line  using the gait traditional at royal ceremonies:

  Right foot forward; bring left foot up next to the right foot and no further.

  Repeat.

  That will automatically assure a measured reading of this noble line.

  It should take about a minute.]

Daffy Dactyls

Headline in today’s  New York Times:

Incursions by Turkey

put Greece on Alert

(Chant to the beat of  “To market to market / to buy a fat pig”.)

Politico-prosodical footnote:
While world history is being made on the fly,

POTUS is venting  unedited -- and without scansion.

At the least, he should be required to phrase everything

in dactylic measures.

That would also  give time  for reflection.

Butch monostich

    … le sévèr-e Char-lus    tout de noir  habillé …

[ -- Proust, La Prisonnière (1919), p. 212]

Arabic Adonis

This week’s New Yorker has a brief but keenly interesting article on modern Arabic politics and poetry, by Robyn Cresswell of Yale, taking off from the Syrian (lapsed-Alawite) poet Adonis.

The author remarks on the difficulty of finding satisfactory translations for this verse, owing in particular to the “rhetorical grandeur” characteristic of classical Arabic.   Actually we see part of the problem, more cultural than linguistic, right in the poet’s nom de plume, Adonis.  Cresswell diplomatically explains the eponym as a “vegetal deity of death and resurrection”.    The thumbnail from the Britannica lays the emphasis elsewhere:  “in Greek mythology, a youth of remarkable beauty, the favourite of the goddess Aphrodite … Traditionally, he was the product of the incestuous love Smyrna entertained for her own father”.  To an American, the name conjures up something like Jean Marais (Cocteau’s greek-godling toyboy) rather than anything religious.

An additional problem for the translator of this poetry is, paradoxically, the relative lack of technical prosodic problems, since it is mostly free verse -- “tennis with the net down” to begin with -- so that the translator has not the challenge of recreating some sense of the original prosody, as FitzGerald so brilliantly did  with his version of Omar’s Rubaiyat, or Charles Lyall’s metrical experiments in rendering pre-Islamic Arabian verse.  That is to say, a translation cannot be really successful unless confronted  in the original  with something that is in some respects untranslatable.

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For our own attempts to grapple with the treasures of the Arabian verse-hoard, try this:

Miscellaneous Amatory Preludes

Imitations of Old Arabic Poetry (II)

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Name of the Day: “Henery”

Back in 1965, when I still listened to the blandly homogenized pop medium known as Top 40 radio, a song soared onto the charts  that didn’t fit the rock & roll mold at all, and seemed to come from another world:  “I'm Henery the Eighth, I Am”.  It was harmless, charming, catchy.   Once ever you heard it, you could never forget it:

    I'm 'Enery the Eighth, I am,

    'Enery the Eighth I am, I am!

    I got married to the widow next door,

    She's been married seven times before

    And every one was an 'Enery

    She wouldn't have a Willie nor a Sam

    I'm her eighth old man named 'Enery

    'Enery the Eighth, I am!

Wikipedia (that fount of all that is good and true) provides the surprising background.  It is a British music-hall song dating back to as early as 1910 -- few indeed were the ditties of such venerable vintage that made it onto the pop playlists.  And yet -- scarcely to be credited:

In 1965, it became the fastest-selling song in history to that point when it was revived by Herman's Hermits.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/I'm_Henery_the_Eighth,_I_Am

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What revived that memory  was a passage in Thomas Hardy’s Far from the Madding Crowd (1874), referring to a simple workman of rural southwest England:

He always signed his name "Henery"—strenuously insisting upon that spelling, and if any passing schoolmaster ventured to remark that the second "e" was superfluous and old-fashioned, he received the reply that "H-e-n-e-r-y" was the name he was christened and the name he would stick to—in the tone of one to whom orthographical differences were matters which had a great deal to do with personal character. 

As kids, exposed to the ditty, we made no philological hypotheses concerning the trisyllabic name -- just something silly, metri causâ, we supposed.  But Hardy’s witness demonstrates that the pronunciation is time-honored among the English popular classes.

Yea indeed, still further up the scale:  for the regal name of Henry is trisyllabic in Shakespeare.

The medial schwa is not etymological, but the product of popular epenthesis (or anaptyxis, if you insist), like the pronunciation “ellum” for elm, or the by-form alarum from alarm.

Psycho-literary afternote:
This serial connubium, relentlessly running through no fewer than eight grooms, might be seen as a feminine revenge -- a payback with interest --  against the original polynubial King Henry, who actually limited himself to half a dozen.

"N-n-ex-x-x-t !!"

Rules of Evidence

Farther back than Iago, or than those who slandered A’ishah (the Prophet’s denunciation of these  constitutes the longest of the Ahâdîth), stands, or rather skulks, the figure of the Calumniator (al-wāšī, el calumniador):  impugning the reputation of a faithful lover, to break up a union.   The question of motive is something of a mystery.

A comparatively innocent instantiation was the 1960 song “Staying In”, sung with teenage angst but on a gently rocking rhythm:

I punched my buddy in the nose after lunch.
Now I'm in trouble 'cause the dean saw the punch
He was tellin' things that were not true about her
So I let him have it in the:  cafeteri-a.

Now I'm stayin' in,   stayin' in
Now my baby's walkin' home with him.
They passed my window hand-in-hand just then
But what can I do? 'cause I'm stayin' in.

If she just knew what that son-of-a-gun said
I know she wouldn't   be caught    with him dead
She don't know what he has got up his sleeve
But she would find out if I could only leave

 

(Note, by the by, that here, by dint of syncopated ictus, the lyricist manages to make her rhyme with cafeteria.  No mean feat.)

By 1963, the tone was less Galahadean, and meaner: “My Boyfriend’s Back”.  A girl sneers with Schadenfreude at the thrashing her calumniator will soon receive:

You’ve been telling lies   that I was un-true-hoo.

Well look out now,  ‘cause he’s coming after you-hoo!

The rhythm here is relentless, four-on-four, like a sledgehammer, or a fist on a face.

Antedating these is a gem from that vintage year of 1959: "My Heart is an Open Book".

Some jealous so-and-so
wants us to  part

That’s why he’s telling you

that I’ve got -- a cheating heart.

Don’t  - be - lieve !
All   -  those - lies !

Dar-ling just be-  lieve your eyes, and

Look;

Look;

My heart is an  op-en book.

I:

love:

No-bod-y  but : You.

It is difficult to convey, in mere print (however much we fiddle with the formatting), the plain candor, the openness, conveyed by this song.   He does not argue the matter, but lets himself be read:  like Jesus in the oleographs, pointing to a glowing heart within his chest.

The music too reflects this simplicity, though in an antisymmetric way.   A chirpy girl-choir accompaniment  trips lightly up the scale, like cherubs on the stairway to heaven:  “Tootle-e-tootle-e-tootle-e-TOOT!”;  while on the key pleading, containing the whole of the singer’s epistemology, his voice descends, unhurriedly,

            Dar-

                ling

                   just
                       be-

                         lieve
                            your

                                eyes

like Plato descending the steps in the “School of Athens”.

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To return:   For most crimes, whether pecuniary or violent, the payoff for the perpetrator is manifest.  But what could motivate the Calumniator? In the “Staying In” case, apparently bare rivalry: the calumniator wants the same girl (though one suspects that a relationship cadged by such means  will be unstable).  But that is not the case with Iago, nor with the “so-and-so” here.   No self-interest is readily discernable;  the motivation appears to be actually Satanic.

Or, perhaps, there are unconscious motivations.   To expend your envy, you can do something as simple as keying the guy’s Jaguar.   But here, crucially, the goal is not so much to injure the Envied One in his person, as to deprive him of an amour:  thus incidentally (in fantasy) placing him back in play…  But such spelunking we leave to the Viennese alienist.

Methodological Monostich

Thére the mátter must rést,     pénding more ádequate dáta.

[The above is a dactylic hexameter -- the heroic line -- here found nestling in scholarly prose.

Source: David Lightfoot, Principles of Diachronic Syntax (1879), p. 213]

Abyssinian Epigram

The Emperor passes

in a great red car,

surróunded by cántering láncers.

[Evelyn Waugh, reporting from Addis Ababa, 1930;

prosodic tashkil  added editorially.]